WRITING TASK 2
You should spend around 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
|The government should control the amount of violence on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society.|
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Write at least 250 words.
The government should control the amount of violence on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many television programs – serialized dramas such as Game of Thrones, reality shows like Fear Factor, and sports events like UFC – which rely on human-on-human brutality have garnered huge audiences worldwide. In spite of concerns pertaining to their repercussions for the society, I believe that violence in real life is born out of malice and resentment, which are independent of television content.
Firstly, we have to concede that there is a capacity for evil in all human beings. Life is full of suffering, so a range of challenges push the boundaries of our patience and righteousness. Placing the blame for violence on television is deflecting attention from the crux of the matter. Contrary to belief, violent entertainment programs may help to lessen the grudge that people hold in their hearts. For example, when my best friend Rahul Singh was bullied at school, he turned to watching mixed martial arts contests on television which helped him to loosen up.
Nevertheless, as media has become virtually ubiquitous, we hear a lot about mass shootings or armed robberies. Simultaneously, television programs containing cruelty and savagery are on the rise. But conflating correlation with causation is a logical fallacy. Selective outrage against such television networks or show creators is a disservice to their right to artistic endeavor and an assault on fans who love fictional or entertaining depiction of violence but never act out in reality. For instance, almost all of my 400 Facebook friends loved the Game of Thrones television series which is notorious for its portrayal of war and rape. However, none of us have lost our grip on civil behavior.
I conclude that this outcry over the contents of modern-day television distracts us from the true nature of hatred in people. Thus, in order to bring peace, the onus is on society, family, and support groups to identify the potential for violence in people and to counteract.
|Color and style code|
|Underlined and italicized sentences are complex sentences.|
Red-colored words are uncommon context-specific words which boost vocabulary score.
Orange-colored words and phrases are discourse markers which boost the score for coherence and cohesion.
Blue-colored phrases are idiomatic expressions, or collocations, or phrasal verbs which increase the score for lexical resources.
Green-colored words are referencing devices for the purpose of cohesion.
How to score high in the IELTS essay question?
First of all, the essay has to answer all parts of the question in logically-developed and well-supported argumentative paragraphs.
Secondly, it needs to use discourse markers and cohesive devices for coherence.
Thirdly, there should a wide range of sophisticated vocabulary.
And lastly, the essay should be composed of error-free sentences, including some complex grammatical structures.
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